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Author: gwenn sundala
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my church has been going through Rick Warren's updated version of The Purpose Driven Life, and as part of this i attend a small group once a week. this past week, as we were talking about the need we as humans have to belong to something, i felt some inspiration and this came out. it's just a start, and i plan on putting it to music. but just a rough draft and wanted some initial reaction to it.
~ poem written 3/23/17


Send Me



can you see the broken-hearted?
can you hear their desperate plea
begging God to send them someone
who will care about their needs?
through the wind and stormy weather,
there's no shelter they can find -
they think love will never find them;
would you care to spare your time?

here i am, Lord;
send me.
open my eyes,
make me see -
the lost and the hurting,
left with no prayer;
send me to help them
and show them you care.

doctors tend the sick and needy,
nurses always on the call,
policemen and firefighters;
people who've given their all.
do they turn their backs upon those
they have sworn to serve and help?
why should we, then, turn our backs on
those who need our Savior's love?

here i am, Lord;
send me.
open my eyes,
make me see -
the lost and the hurting,
left with no prayer;
send me to help them
and tell them you're there.

darkened hearts in need of healing -
Jesus came to give his life.
he asks us to spread his message;
love these broken people as we love ourselves.

here i am, Lord;
send me.
open my eyes,
make me see -
i'm lost and i'm hurting,
you're my only prayer;
send me to tell the world
that you are always there.




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  I think you're on to something here. The only part that gave me pause was the line "nurses always on the call." I'd remove the "the." If you ever get this this put to music please let me know and send a link to it. It has the potential to touch a lot of hearts. Great job.
| Posted on 2017-04-25 00:00:00 | by bentnotbroken | [ Reply to This ]
  This is a really good piece. I liked the rhyme scheme, the contrast between the part I assume will be the chorus and the rest of the piece really does make for a musical read. My favorite thing was the description of the helpful people, and the call we should all be answering to that higher purpose to enjoy and give yourself over vulnerably to your Lords. Trust is a beautiful and powerful thing. I really feel your words are so inspired here. Thank you for sharing.
| Posted on 2017-03-27 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]


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