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    dots Submission Name: Thunder and Lightning dots
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    Author: gwenn sundala
    Elite Ratio:    3.71 - 76/70/51
    Words: 94
    Class/Type: Prose/Passion
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    Description:
       I wrote this during a particularly stimulating thunderstorm a while back


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    dotsThunder and Lightning dots
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    The clouds grow black, sky grows dark
    Heavy rains fall
    Underneath the blackened sky
    Night seems to take over
    Day is hidden in the darkness
    Every child seeks to hide
    Running from the dreary sight
    All the wind is singing now
    Night has come
    Day is gone
    Lights flash before the ringing boom
    I tremble with anticipation
    God-like voices fill the skies
    Heavy, dark, loud and booming
    Transcending my very being
    Night's storm takes over
    In this tumultuous state
    Now is where peace transcends
    Giving thought to blessed memory







    Submitted on 2017-03-28 23:19:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      A bit too descriptive in the beginning. I think you could have accomplished the same thing using fewer lines. The second part of the poem is better. By expressing your feelings you manage to explain the atmosphere much better. Keep writing, it's a dying art!
    | Posted on 2017-04-10 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]
      Ah lightning bow's hat pick, straight up forever ontology on high. We all rise to the occasion and vent into the atmosphere and peace transcends.

    Bruce
    | Posted on 2017-03-28 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]


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