The Price

Author: Janesaddiction ASL Info:    48/F/Somewhere on A1A Elite Ratio:    1.93 - 8 /25 /20 Words: 59

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The Price

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Tired and worn bitter and torn All for the sake of stopping the ache Commit with a grin ultimate sin ending from where I dared to begin Alive in the glory forgetting the story Offer of sacrifice never to pay the price Alone and bent everything spent one day to wonder where it all went

Submitted on 2017-04-04 12:33:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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I like the close rhyming pattern in this poem. I used to write very similar to this some times. As for the subject matter I dunno what to say. I see your name, listen to "Been Caught Stealing" when you feel like this. That song always makes me feel good. :) Keep writing!

| Posted on 2017-04-11 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]

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