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The Price


Author: Janesaddiction
ASL Info:    48/F/Somewhere on A1A
Elite Ratio:    1.93 - 8 /25 /20
Words: 59
Class/Type: Misc /Misc
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The Price



Tired and worn
bitter and torn
All for the sake
of stopping the ache

Commit with a grin
ultimate sin
ending from where
I dared to begin

Alive in the glory
forgetting the story
Offer of sacrifice
never to pay the price

Alone and bent
everything spent
one day to wonder
where it all went




Submitted on 2017-04-04 12:33:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I like the close rhyming pattern in this poem. I used to write very similar to this some times. As for the subject matter I dunno what to say. I see your name, listen to "Been Caught Stealing" when you feel like this. That song always makes me feel good. :) Keep writing!
| Posted on 2017-04-11 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]


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