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    dots Submission Name: The Pricedots
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    Author: Janesaddiction
    ASL Info:    48/F/Somewhere on A1A
    Elite Ratio:    1.99 - 8/24/17
    Words: 59
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsThe Pricedots
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    Tired and worn
    bitter and torn
    All for the sake
    of stopping the ache

    Commit with a grin
    ultimate sin
    ending from where
    I dared to begin

    Alive in the glory
    forgetting the story
    Offer of sacrifice
    never to pay the price

    Alone and bent
    everything spent
    one day to wonder
    where it all went




    Submitted on 2017-04-04 12:33:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like the close rhyming pattern in this poem. I used to write very similar to this some times. As for the subject matter I dunno what to say. I see your name, listen to "Been Caught Stealing" when you feel like this. That song always makes me feel good. :) Keep writing!
    | Posted on 2017-04-11 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]


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