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    dots Submission Name: Mended Heartdots

    Author: Poetic_tragedy6
    ASL Info:    25/F/OR
    Elite Ratio:    2.65 - 114/155/74
    Words: 168
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsMended Heartdots

    You're like oil on my skin
    Seeping through each pore
    I soak you up
    And feel you in my core
    Every time you leave
    I am left craving more

    Those blue eyes see right through me
    And I expose all that is inside
    I want to show you everything
    I no longer have a reason to hide
    I never find a living soul
    That I could really confide

    You are like water on my body
    Cleansing me to be pure
    And I reach out for you
    Whenever I am unsure
    I was so very sick of life
    With you, I find a cure

    You are like a shooting star
    Lighting up my night sky
    Your presence is magnificent
    And I never wonder why
    For your comfort
    There is nothing I wouldn't try

    You make life vivid
    Technicolor and alive
    It drowns me like the ocean
    Into which I gladly dive
    And I couldn't be any happier
    Because of you, I can now thrive

    Submitted on 2017-04-05 11:39:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I like this poem, it's kinda cute but I dunno about the title, that's what drew me in but I don't think it really fits the poem...
    | Posted on 2017-04-11 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]
      I love the imagery in this piece, the sense of security the other person makes you feel. Keep on writing and expanding more on your thoughts. Good Luck.

    | Posted on 2017-04-08 00:00:00 | by Latin King | [ Reply to This ]

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