Writingpoetry

[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

dotsdots
nav
  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav



    nav
  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav



    << | >>
    poetry


    dots Submission Name: Mended Heartdots
    --------------------------------------------------------





    Author: Poetic_tragedy6
    ASL Info:    25/F/OR
    Elite Ratio:    2.65 - 114/155/74
    Words: 168
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 440
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1036



    Description:
       


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsMended Heartdots
    -------------------------------------------


    You're like oil on my skin
    Seeping through each pore
    I soak you up
    And feel you in my core
    Every time you leave
    I am left craving more

    Those blue eyes see right through me
    And I expose all that is inside
    I want to show you everything
    I no longer have a reason to hide
    I never find a living soul
    That I could really confide

    You are like water on my body
    Cleansing me to be pure
    And I reach out for you
    Whenever I am unsure
    I was so very sick of life
    With you, I find a cure

    You are like a shooting star
    Lighting up my night sky
    Your presence is magnificent
    And I never wonder why
    For your comfort
    There is nothing I wouldn't try

    You make life vivid
    Technicolor and alive
    It drowns me like the ocean
    Into which I gladly dive
    And I couldn't be any happier
    Because of you, I can now thrive




    Submitted on 2017-04-05 11:39:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||
      I like this poem, it's kinda cute but I dunno about the title, that's what drew me in but I don't think it really fits the poem...
    | Posted on 2017-04-11 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]
      I love the imagery in this piece, the sense of security the other person makes you feel. Keep on writing and expanding more on your thoughts. Good Luck.

    Marco
    | Posted on 2017-04-08 00:00:00 | by Latin King | [ Reply to This ]


    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?



    201748

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

    Still Fighting See? written by ForgottenGraves
    I will call out your name written by RisingSon
    Hopelessly Blind written by ForgottenGraves
    Transparent written by Daniel Barlow
    Life changes in a moment written by Ramneet
    Love Can Be... written by HAVENSMITH92
    This written by Chelebel
    cleverly shunned written by CrypticBard
    Once Again written by krs3332003
    Linger written by saartha
    Wavelength written by saartha
    What happens written by Wolfwatching
    Red Barn written by rev.jpfadeproof
    Pressure written by hybridsongwrite
    Munyonyo written by expiring_touch
    Be Free written by hybridsongwrite
    To Glow written by krs3332003
    Break Up written by WriteSomething
    Sunset written by rev.jpfadeproof
    One Thing written by Wolfwatching
    Unfortunate Reality written by TeslaKoyal
    Incubus written by monad
    To written by SavedDragon
    Bee Keeper written by endlessgame23
    To the King written by HisNameIsNoMore
    Treasure Chest written by PieceOfCake
    Wish written by Daniel Barlow
    untitled written by Chelebel
    Summer Nights written by ollie_wicked
    102.3 written by rev.jpfadeproof

    Google
     


    poetry

    dotsLogindots

    User Name:

    Password:

    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]


    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems
    Posted

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]



    FontSize:
    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]
     Poetry