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    dots Submission Name: Two Dancing Feet dots
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    Author: Chelebel
    Elite Ratio:    2.2 - 53/167/175
    Words: 39
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    Description:
       To dance or to watch.


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    dotsTwo Dancing Feet dots
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    Starting
    with everybody
    Putting
    On their
    dancing feet.
    Extending a
    Heart and
    Voice.
    Ending
    With
    Warm
    Fuzzies.













    Submitted on 2017-04-10 01:46:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      As Paradox says, this is kind of weak. PLEASE try again, rewrite this. I would never intentionally stifle another, but reach deeper. One word per line may work but only in a limited context, and never to the benefit of prose.
    | Posted on 2017-04-16 00:00:00 | by Jonathan Ryner | [ Reply to This ]
      I dunno, I guess that was not your intention but when I read this line: "everybody Putting On their dancing feet" I saw a room full of people literally doing that. :D Sitting on chairs and putting on their feet. :D I dunno, you might have something here but the ending is kinda weak imo. I guess I hate the word fuzzies or something but this just doesn't work for me...
    | Posted on 2017-04-11 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]


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