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    dots Submission Name: As she lay sleepingdots
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    Author: Jonathan Ryner
    ASL Info:    41 Male Round Rock, Texas
    Elite Ratio:    2.97 - 12/14/10
    Words: 42
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsAs she lay sleepingdots
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    As she lay sleeping...
    my desire grows firm,
    to have her,
    to wound her in her pit...
    her deepest being, that which makes her her,
    My want is a lust,
    bourne of primates,
    vile and violent
    and yet loving,
    and passionate.




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