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    dots Submission Name: Love Haikudots
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    Author: concrete_rose
    ASL Info:    31/f/nc
    Elite Ratio:    2.59 - 43/52/34
    Words: 68
    Class/Type: Haiku/Misc
    Total Views: 663
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       Just some haiku I was messing around with...thx


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    dotsLove Haikudots
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    The lovers are free;
    washing over sweet tides;
    There is no one else.

    The heart wonders wise,
    searching out the dawn of life;
    Watching for the sun.

    The promise of more,
    Reaches the aching soul;
    There is something else!

    When the colors gone,
    on the tired brides rosy cheek;
    Resting she will along with him.












    Submitted on 2017-04-24 18:08:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I thought of a endless thought , like my imagination was hurled toward the rose. Feeling of the poetry was warm but shorten , i wanted more .
    Thank you, Teika5

    | Posted on 2017-07-08 00:00:00 | by teika5 | [ Reply to This ]


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