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Love Haiku


Author: concrete_rose
ASL Info:    31/f/nc
Elite Ratio:    2.59 - 43 /52 /34
Words: 68
Class/Type: Haiku /Misc
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Just some haiku I was messing around with...thx


Love Haiku



The lovers are free;
washing over sweet tides;
There is no one else.

The heart wonders wise,
searching out the dawn of life;
Watching for the sun.

The promise of more,
Reaches the aching soul;
There is something else!

When the colors gone,
on the tired brides rosy cheek;
Resting she will along with him.












Submitted on 2017-04-24 18:08:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I thought of a endless thought , like my imagination was hurled toward the rose. Feeling of the poetry was warm but shorten , i wanted more .
Thank you, Teika5

| Posted on 2017-07-08 00:00:00 | by teika5 | [ Reply to This ]


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