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Submission Name: Silver dots

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Author:	Blue7
Elite Ratio:	1.4 - 1/3/1
Words:	150

Class/Type:	Poetry/Misc
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"Silver" is the only poem I've ever published in my 30 years of writing poetry. A lot of my poetry is under "lynn7" on this site. I've written a lot of new poems in the last few months and will post some soon.

Silver

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I shed my tears
for your pain
I look to the heavens
and back again

I dreamt about you
when I was a child
I could not see your face
but your heart
was open wide

when I close my eyes
I see silver all around
even though outside
my world is
crashing down
crashing down

I forgot about you
for a while
until the moment
I could feel
you smile

you inspire me
to right who I am
to seek the truth
and the condemned

when I close my eyes
I see silver all around
even though outside
the world is
crashing down
crashing down

I am blind on this journey
needing a hand hold
until that day
I will soon realize
that I have wings
and can

fly away
fly away

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  this was good reading, thank you for this. reminds me im not alone
| Posted on 2017-11-30 00:00:00 | by mysalvation | [ Reply to This ]
  I dream the logic you spoke of , it was like the i felt like knowing something other than myself. The warm fuzzy no's of life , ya know. even if one can trans-sin a moment to the positive it is a moment worth having . That's the way it was to take in you reading ....
Teika5 -----

| Posted on 2017-07-04 00:00:00 | by teika5 | [ Reply to This ]
  Just my edit

I shed my tears in your pain
looked to the heavens and back
I dreamt of you when I was a child.

I could see your face and your heart
it was open wide, I closed my eyes
I see a silver lining all around you.

Even though outside my world
crashing down, crashed down
I forgot about us for a while.

Until a moment I could feel
you smile, you inspired me
I write who I am the truth.

The condemned when I
I closed my eyes to see
a silver lining around.

Even though outside
the world it crashed
and crashed down.

I am blind to this
journey needing
a hand to hold.

Until that day
I too realized
I have wings.

We fly away
and now fly
two lovers.

| Posted on 2017-05-01 00:00:00 | by poetotoe | [ Reply to This ]

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