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    dots Submission Name: Silverdots
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    Author: Blue7
    Elite Ratio:    1.4 - 1/3/1
    Words: 150
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 503
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    Description:
        "Silver" is the only poem I've ever published in my 30 years of writing poetry. A lot of my poetry is under "lynn7" on this site. I've written a lot of new poems in the last few months and will post some soon.


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    I shed my tears
    for your pain
    I look to the heavens
    and back again

    I dreamt about you
    when I was a child
    I could not see your face
    but your heart
    was open wide

    when I close my eyes
    I see silver all around
    even though outside
    my world is
    crashing down
    crashing down

    I forgot about you
    for a while
    until the moment
    I could feel
    you smile

    you inspire me
    to right who I am
    to seek the truth
    and the condemned

    when I close my eyes
    I see silver all around
    even though outside
    the world is
    crashing down
    crashing down

    I am blind on this journey
    needing a hand hold
    until that day
    I will soon realize
    that I have wings
    and can

    fly away
    fly away




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      this was good reading, thank you for this. reminds me im not alone
    | Posted on 2017-11-30 00:00:00 | by mysalvation | [ Reply to This ]
      I dream the logic you spoke of , it was like the i felt like knowing something other than myself. The warm fuzzy no's of life , ya know. even if one can trans-sin a moment to the positive it is a moment worth having . That's the way it was to take in you reading ....
    Teika5 -----
    | Posted on 2017-07-04 00:00:00 | by teika5 | [ Reply to This ]
      Just my edit

    I shed my tears in your pain
    looked to the heavens and back
    I dreamt of you when I was a child.

    I could see your face and your heart
    it was open wide, I closed my eyes
    I see a silver lining all around you.

    Even though outside my world
    crashing down, crashed down
    I forgot about us for a while.

    Until a moment I could feel
    you smile, you inspired me
    I write who I am the truth.

    The condemned when I
    I closed my eyes to see
    a silver lining around.

    Even though outside
    the world it crashed
    and crashed down.

    I am blind to this
    journey needing
    a hand to hold.

    Until that day
    I too realized
    I have wings.


    We fly away
    and now fly
    two lovers.
    | Posted on 2017-05-01 00:00:00 | by poetotoe | [ Reply to This ]


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