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    Author: mekisha4ever
    ASL Info:    39yespleaseNV.
    Elite Ratio:    1.58 - 38/36/47
    Words: 150
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 642
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    Description:
       Written for Justin Sheeler my one and only great love.
    Because he was just in time


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    Well You Came to me just in time
    and made me and whole new page
    you took my dull daze a shined your light
    to me your oh so bright.

    Just in time you came to my aid
    and took my body and made me beg
    for all your love you openly gave
    and just for you I will behave

    just in time you brought new hope
    in love with you and that's no joke
    with you I will never be broke
    and have a life that is for us both

    so now with time we both can stand just in time to see our DAD come to take us home to that great hall
    where we both will love and stand tall for you and I will never fall from his grace above all




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      I thought this was a beautiful poem.
    | Posted on 2017-08-25 00:00:00 | by tomeliot | [ Reply to This ]


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