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    dots Submission Name: Ashdots
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    Author: MysterydarkPoet
    ASL Info:    20/f/Aust
    Elite Ratio:    3.14 - 157/294/173
    Words: 285
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsAshdots
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    She's like acid rain
    She's burning you black
    Slowly smoking, smouldering-
    Turning you to ash.

    Creating an ocean of ash
    For us to drown in
    And dreams to suffocate in.

    But this you can't see.
    Turning off your lighthouse-
    You don't want to see.

    We have our buckets and we are bailing
    But I'm not practiced at this-
    I'm failing.
    drowning in the tears that I won't cry

    There's no concept of time here
    Yesterday is today
    And today is 3 years ago
    Every day.
    In a loop,
    Where everything replays
    And nothing changes.
    Except the ash is thicker,
    And the air is thinner.

    And still,
    Every day I wake, &
    Despite my silent prayers
    All there is, is ash.

    But In the black,
    Sometimes I see
    the shadow of your image
    Reaching to touch-
    It disappears.
    The light disintegrates false hope.
    Consumed and claimed by the black.
    The chain is heavy, I cannot break it.
    I feel alone, yet I would take two.
    heavy too with my own chain
    It's own strength
    It's own breed
    I cannot escape.

    All I have is shapeless,
    shards of dust in my hands
    What can I build?
    If I do not have a backbone,
    What is to build?
    My memories too are shapeless
    Timeless but a lifetime ago.
    How do I build?
    All there is, is ash.

    Echoes may not ring
    But my oars have not moved
    Nor my boat altered course.
    Ash laps my sides
    But your anchor was always mine.

    Wasting away as hope deteriorates my faith
    I think of her face.
    Is it like yours?




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