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    dots Submission Name: Free Firedots
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    Author: yesmole
    Elite Ratio:    3.4 - 6/11/6
    Words: 113
    Class/Type: Story/Longing
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    dotsFree Firedots
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    Sheer raging hatred blooming into fire
    While all else remains calm.

    I breath the calm fire
    Hoping to keep my cool.

    I want to think cool thoughts
    While fire consumes my lungs.

    I want my thoughts inspired by fire.
    I am a steam train with fire in my belly.

    Seeing the parallel tracks running into the distance
    I can run forever.

    On steel tracks on fire
    Prometheus steals fire from the Gods.

    All I need to do is keep my cool
    Hold my fire until I see the fear in their eyes.

    I watch "Free Fire" https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=csH3FUfRiSg
    Pick up my AK 47 and go to work.




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