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    dots Submission Name: The Mountaindots
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    Author: yesmole
    Elite Ratio:    3.4 - 6/11/6
    Words: 99
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       Finding my way to the mountain.


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    dotsThe Mountaindots
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    The sheer impossibility
    Is enough to make me give up.

    But it won't let me go.
    It tears at me.

    I seek refuge
    For a time.

    Then I think,
    Perhaps I can climb the mountain.

    I take the first step.
    Oh, how many steps more?

    I can feel the mountain
    Pressing up through my feet.

    And in return
    I press down on the mountain.

    We start to breath together
    The crisp mountain air.

    The mountain has been waiting for me,
    Just as I have been waiting for the mountain.





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    ||| Comments |||
      Keep our eyes on the prize , our sight grows dim with pain,,
    in and around the lake , But then A moment that hepls us look back a laugh at some kind of pain that seem impassable ,,,,Teika5---
    | Posted on 2017-07-04 00:00:00 | by teika5 | [ Reply to This ]
      There's nothing like a challenge, whether physical or not. I like the idea of bonding with the mountain/challenge into a one on one relationship thing.

    Lloyd
    | Posted on 2017-05-08 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]


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