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    dots Submission Name: Something Like Love and Heartbreakdots
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    Author: JanePlane
    ASL Info:    125/F/everyplane
    Elite Ratio:    6.76 - 415/433/130
    Words: 47
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    Something Like Love and Heartbreak

    My leaves
    fell like sunset
    gold and bright orange-red.
    Every other shade
    of autumn fell with them.

    Winter set in
    and I could see my breath.
    So at least I knew
    I wasn’t dead.





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      Jane,
    I feel heartbreak in the falling leaves. Your winter's breath makes me feel the emptiness that follows. You often have an engaging way with nature in your poetry that I much appreciate.
    | Posted on 2017-06-11 00:00:00 | by my shadow | [ Reply to This ]
      It is no surprise that nature is used as such a perfect metaphor for the stages and seasons of life. Here you have captured this beautifully.

    Erin
    | Posted on 2017-05-27 00:00:00 | by BlankSheet | [ Reply to This ]
      The perm-frost melted
    I opened up my blossoms
    to spring at the cerulean sky

    and breathed
    | Posted on 2017-05-09 00:00:00 | by KeeperOfLight | [ Reply to This ]


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