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The Junk Road


Author: HisNameIsNoMore
ASL Info:    28 - Male - Ohio
Elite Ratio:    2.95 - 75 /194 /254
Words: 80
Class/Type: Poetry /Dark
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The Junk Road



Pewter blinks of tarnished glass,
crumbling and cracked,
beneath dirt, oil and broke ambition -
filthy reminder of the past,
and where humanity's reflection -
cracked.

Ethereal wreckage of gnarled stars,
lamented and wailed,
abandoned light, hope and time –
rubber soles on worn souls,
who knows but they and us –
what paths have been lost.

With each step we leave behind,
we pass someone life derides,
alone and dead –
broken on the junk road.




Submitted on 2017-05-06 21:46:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  The path of us in a restful state , left as we left it, how ever that might of been. Your free-verse reminds me of how sad a car look when on, Fire".
teka5
| Posted on 2017-07-10 00:00:00 | by teika5 | [ Reply to This ]
  Ok, I'm favoriting this. I just fell in love with the imagery. You never fail to disappoint , my friend. I apologize for never commenting on your earlier work even though I've always enjoyed it. Stay amazing.
| Posted on 2017-05-21 00:00:00 | by eggshells | [ Reply to This ]


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