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    dots Submission Name: As A Bee Seesdots

    Author: homeless
    ASL Info:    30
    Elite Ratio:    7.61 - 29/18/23
    Words: 88
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsAs A Bee Seesdots

    Tis the vision of a flower;
    In the bosom of her bloom,
    Radiances of joy fill the room;
    A moment melts into an hour;
    My nature falls unto her power;
    As a bee, drawn to her perfume.
    A kiss; a honeycomb - her embrace; my tomb.
    Upon her skin, a dew to devour;
    Betwixt her petals, within the bower,
    An endless bounty, I cannot assume;
    Yet, dispossessed would foredoom.
    My love, I do avow her.
    To rest upon where she lay;
    I'd let my heart its final day.

    Submitted on 2017-05-09 09:05:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I shampoo my hair with "Touch of Silver", an invisible pigment in the ultraviolet.

    So only a bee can see my ultraviolet hair, but looking through your eyes, it bursts into view.
    | Posted on 2017-05-09 00:00:00 | by yesmole | [ Reply to This ]

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