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    dots Submission Name: Poseidondots
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    Author: yesmole
    Elite Ratio:    3.4 - 6/11/6
    Words: 136
    Class/Type: Prose/Serious
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    Description:
       From poetry to the sea, to Australia, to Poseidon.


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    dotsPoseidondots
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    Setting sail on the sea of poetry
    I don't know where it will take me.
    There may be rough seas ahead
    Or I might find a sunny little cove.

    But whatever, I am sailing in the bosom of the deep blue sea.
    It is beyond my understanding,
    Doesn't respond to my pleas or entreaties,
    Like a God it is sui generis, impossible not to worship.

    And whatever I worship, I become.
    I become the pitiless storm tearing ships apart.
    I carry the British around the bottom of the Earth
    On the Westerly Trade Winds, racing over the rollers, all the way to Hobart Town.

    And then I hold in my hands Australia Felix
    Girt by sea.
    Riding the waves on my surfboard
    I become Poseidon, God of the Sea.






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      Yes, as Erin said this is a great read. Adventure and invocation is a win win. "And whatever I worship, I become." captures the essence of a mystic (IMHO).

    I once dreamt that my dad would reincarnate as Poseidon, God of the Sea.

    Lloyd
    | Posted on 2017-06-11 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]
      That third stanza is the poem's heart.

    "Whatever I worship, I become. I become the pitiless storm tearing ships apart."

    Yes, yes! There is something so collectively timeless about the sea. It is so enormous and has many faces. Surfing is incredible to watch. I love how the people who do it well make it look so easy and fun.

    Great read, thank you!

    Erin
    | Posted on 2017-05-30 00:00:00 | by BlankSheet | [ Reply to This ]


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