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    dots Submission Name: The Human Staindots
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    Author: HisNameIsNoMore
    ASL Info:    28 - Male - Ohio
    Elite Ratio:    3.09 - 75/182/213
    Words: 63
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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    dotsThe Human Staindots
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    There is no concept,
    face nor place,
    once upon a time waits for no one.
    Time holds on,
    elderly fingers that nervously anticipate,
    tears in the tapestry;
    tears on the face.

    I look into you,
    mirror or horror,
    in poverty of my being that stayed behind.
    love left blind,
    naïve touches of ghostly faith,
    human condition- God above;
    human condition- forgotten love.




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      I like it , though the work is a bit choppy , THe wording is very strong , all that is about the art. though I had a tough time fallow-ing the pice , because there seem to be something in my eye or it could be expanded upon . I like the them, of of the work, It touches me at my latter age , cause it feels just that way, Thank you for putting it into words.
    Teika5
    | Posted on 2017-08-25 00:00:00 | by teika5 | [ Reply to This ]


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