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    dots Submission Name: This Timedots

    Author: poetotoe
    Elite Ratio:    2.1 - 624/444/496
    Words: 74
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsThis Timedots

    This Time

    When these tears
    reveal our memory
    are they really yours
    yours to keep and hold.

    They seem to linger there
    in time untouched, unedited
    saved in time exactly recalled
    the tears shared in love, in time.

    Love is not staged, love is forever
    for lust is one thing; love is another
    in another time zone a Twilight Zone
    be that far away or that girl next door.

    Submitted on 2017-06-01 18:00:50     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Hello there!

    I really like the format of this, not just the actual words but the symmetry of those words. it was very interesting to read. I don't have anything useful to correct, sorry for the empty feedback.
    | Posted on 2017-06-12 00:00:00 | by PryncessVynom | [ Reply to This ]

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