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Submission Name: Bright Light of Heaven dots

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Author:	ForgottenGraves
ASL Info:	20, Male
Elite Ratio:	0.47 - 5/117/133
Words:	88

Class/Type:	Poetry/Misc
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Bright Light of Heaven dots

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Shadows
Of another me
Haunt me and my heart

Light
Surrender Please
This darkness will tear you apart

Falling
Without a chute
Can't wait to hit the ground hard

Bleeding
From everywhere
I can't get out all these shards

Demons
I beg you please
Put me back together

Angels
Leave me be
I don't deserve your pure feathers

Shadows
Of who I was
Show who is so much stronger

Light
Leave me alone
I can't look at these shadows any longer

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This is a wonderful read. Reminds me of Poe's melancholy darkness. The struggle to hide away from the reminder of everything you once were or could have been and succumb to the darkness inside yourself. The feeling that no matter what little light may still shine within you, it will be no contest to the surrounding, suffocating Black.
You've really embodied that here in a clean and meaningful manner.

Nothing is Dark forever, Dear :)

H.
| Posted on 2017-06-12 00:00:00 | by endlessgame23 | [ Reply to This ]
Well, that's what happens when you fall apart.
| Posted on 2017-06-11 00:00:00 | by poetotoe | [ Reply to This ]

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