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    dots Submission Name: The Unwanted New Lifedots

    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/380
    Words: 150
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       RIP David

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    dotsThe Unwanted New Lifedots

    A barrage of images will soon flood my “on this day” news feed
    Old comments ever so memorializing this day those expressing deep condolences
    Their words are pure
    However, they fall on deaf ears
    Read by glazed eyes
    Life … what I had seen my life to be has drastically changed
    You were someone who was always going to be there
    Eventually we’d compromise on the main things and our friendship would remain
    Occasionally we’d make time to sit and reminisce
    I’d go to karaoke night to hear that amazing voice you were gifted with
    We’d hug say our love yous and part ways
    Knowing deep down we are there for the other no matter what
    Yet, none of this is possible
    For, a barrage of images will soon flood my “on this day” news feed
    My life, our life together whatever it may have been cannot be

    Submitted on 2017-06-03 23:03:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I'm sorry for your loss. Thank you for sharing something so personal. Your loved one is honored by your words and your heart that is so open in this one. I really liked the layers of reality described, the opposing planes of perspective, "on this day" representing the official voice, the media, ect. , then the voices of those in mourning and of yours your experiences, thoughts, and conclusions of it all. Very honest and accurate portrayal of what this exoerience is like.
    | Posted on 2017-06-08 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]

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