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Submission Name: The Unwanted New Life dots

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Author:	jackz
ASL Info:	24/F/OH
Elite Ratio:	3.77 - 591/620/377
Words:	150

Class/Type:	Misc/Misc
Total Views:	107
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RIP David

The Unwanted New Life dots

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A barrage of images will soon flood my “on this day” news feed
Old comments ever so memorializing this day those expressing deep condolences
Their words are pure
However, they fall on deaf ears
Read by glazed eyes
Life … what I had seen my life to be has drastically changed
You were someone who was always going to be there
Eventually we’d compromise on the main things and our friendship would remain
Occasionally we’d make time to sit and reminisce
I’d go to karaoke night to hear that amazing voice you were gifted with
We’d hug say our love yous and part ways
Knowing deep down we are there for the other no matter what
Yet, none of this is possible
For, a barrage of images will soon flood my “on this day” news feed
….
My life, our life together whatever it may have been cannot be

Submitted on 2017-06-03 23:03:04 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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I'm sorry for your loss. Thank you for sharing something so personal. Your loved one is honored by your words and your heart that is so open in this one. I really liked the layers of reality described, the opposing planes of perspective, "on this day" representing the official voice, the media, ect. , then the voices of those in mourning and of yours your experiences, thoughts, and conclusions of it all. Very honest and accurate portrayal of what this exoerience is like.
| Posted on 2017-06-08 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]

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