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    dots Submission Name: Resistance dots
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    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/378
    Words: 162
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsResistance dots
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    I am destitute within a no-mans land
    Where fact and fiction mingle
    Intertwined within one another
    Their relation is that of oil and water
    Nothing but resistance
    Yet, they mingle nonetheless

    My mind is that of the oil
    Memories bubble up to the surface
    Your face ingrained into my consciousness
    Your voice a faint yet strong whisper of my past

    My body - My soul
    Is that of the water
    Thoughts - of my reality
    Drown out your faint voice
    Popping each and every memory that bubbles up to the surface

    My soul knows the reality I am force to live within - without you.
    My mind however - longs to only remember you and I as we once were.

    Nothing but resistance
    Coexisting nonetheless

    I am destitute within a no-mans land
    Where fact and fiction mingle
    Intertwined within one another
    Their relation is that of oil and water
    Nothing but resistance
    Yet, they mingle nonetheless




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      I really enjoyed the duality of this piece, Reality and Memory. It flowed well between the two different yet so similar aspects of the Human conscience. The sorrow and longing was portrayed wonderfully. Especially in the lines,

    "Nothing but resistance
    Coexisting nonetheless"

    Beautiful.

    Thanks for sharing,
    H
    | Posted on 2017-06-26 00:00:00 | by endlessgame23 | [ Reply to This ]


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