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Submission Name: 365 Days dots

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Author:	jackz
ASL Info:	24/F/OH
Elite Ratio:	3.76 - 591/622/380
Words:	169

Class/Type:	Misc/Misc
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RIP my life

365 Days dots

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Three Hundred and Sixty-Five days of reminding myself,your presence here on earth is no longer with us.
Three Hundred and Sixty-Five days’ worth of old memories,new ones are no longer obtainable.
Three Hundred and Sixty-Five nightmares, day dreams …of you, of us, of what was and what is.
Three Hundred and Sixty-Five + remembrances
my life is forever changed.

All that remains of our 10 years on this earth together
Are the memories I carry with me
A few relics that made it through our toughest times
Lastly yet most importantly the urn which holds my beloved David
Solidifying the facts that have now became my reality…

I continue to live this life without you
My best friend
Keeper of my heart
I will do so with honor…

525,600 Minutes Later – Still feels like the first
8,760 Hours Later – Still feels like the first
365 Days Later – Still feels like the first

RIP David S Grayzanic
10-7-1976 / 06-8-2016

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I felt the loss and sorrow all throughout the piece, but in the last stanza it was a sucker punch to the Soul.
Watching each minute pass into the future is watching a sacrifice to an unseen god. Painful and inevitable. Even more so when stained with the loss of love.
The old bit about Time healing all wounds is a crock. Time creates them.

Thanks for sharing,
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| Posted on 2017-06-28 00:00:00 | by endlessgame23 | [ Reply to This ]

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Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3 It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
It means a lot to them, as it does to you.