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    dots Submission Name: 365 Daysdots
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    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/380
    Words: 169
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       RIP my life


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    Three Hundred and Sixty-Five days of reminding myself,your presence here on earth is no longer with us.
    Three Hundred and Sixty-Five days’ worth of old memories,new ones are no longer obtainable.
    Three Hundred and Sixty-Five nightmares, day dreams …of you, of us, of what was and what is.
    Three Hundred and Sixty-Five + remembrances
    my life is forever changed.

    All that remains of our 10 years on this earth together
    Are the memories I carry with me
    A few relics that made it through our toughest times
    Lastly yet most importantly the urn which holds my beloved David
    Solidifying the facts that have now became my reality…

    I continue to live this life without you
    My best friend
    Keeper of my heart
    I will do so with honor…

    525,600 Minutes Later – Still feels like the first
    8,760 Hours Later – Still feels like the first
    365 Days Later – Still feels like the first

    RIP David S Grayzanic
    10-7-1976 / 06-8-2016




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      I felt the loss and sorrow all throughout the piece, but in the last stanza it was a sucker punch to the Soul.
    Watching each minute pass into the future is watching a sacrifice to an unseen god. Painful and inevitable. Even more so when stained with the loss of love.
    The old bit about Time healing all wounds is a crock. Time creates them.

    Thanks for sharing,
    H
    | Posted on 2017-06-28 00:00:00 | by endlessgame23 | [ Reply to This ]


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