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    dots Submission Name: Temporal Displacementdots
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    Author: endlessgame23
    ASL Info:    25/f/The Endless Table
    Elite Ratio:    3.24 - 28/41/44
    Words: 125
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Broken
    Total Views: 516
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    Bytes: 980



    Description:
       Broken flux capacitors are extremely difficult to repair when outside of tangible dimensions.


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    dotsTemporal Displacementdots
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    I live moment to moment
    Or one endless second.
    Depends on which Plane we're flying.
    Some Times, forever is a lonely minute
    Other Times, a second lasts eternally.
    Times never end.
    Or begin, we're all just waiting..

    waiting
    waiting
    waiting

    All the clocks have stopped in
    Different hours, biorhythms, and cosmic vibrations
    I've never been good at Keeping Time
    He always seems to disappear or be misplaced
    Illusive, imaginary, and mischievous Time
    Lost in circles going 'round and 'round
    A broken mind is an awful place
    when it's only task is to continue

    Waiting
    Waiting
    Waiting

    For what?
    You might ask
    And that is the very question
    that keeps Us right here

    Waiting
    waiting
    Waiting




    Submitted on 2017-06-13 11:54:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I really dig, the phases you took me within the pice . I come from a broken mind , that awaits the time , an gets pass by. Still I wait and labor for excitement, waiting for med.'s , and passing dull time . So, yeah the work has touch a spot in me , and thats the goal right.....Teika5
    | Posted on 2017-07-10 00:00:00 | by teika5 | [ Reply to This ]


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