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    dots Submission Name: Lanadots
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    Author: keestu
    ASL Info:    32/male/Sydney
    Elite Ratio:    5.61 - 153/95/116
    Words: 164
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 289
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       And every second without you beside and I see years pass by.
    Give me a reason to breathe and I shall take your breath away

    But something too good to be true came to an end


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    Till I see you in the rain that drips through the sky,
    the same that flowed down my eyes through your smile.

    And so shall I see myself smile through your lips.
    The heart pains to beat its purpose and show itself.

    Thousands of words :-)

    And so did I caress the bliss in my arms to hold you closer to my heart.
    Can you hear my love to live for you?

    And so did it scream in silence...in peace.

    And an hour passes by with a lifetime in thoughts.
    Come to my arms as I cry inside.
    As empty as space can be, without you is a life unborn.

    Can a dead soul be brought back to life?
    I ask as I smile at you.
    Can you fill my eyes with tears?
    I ask to cry in happiness.

    Come to me, my love...
    Come to me, my Lana...




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