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    dots Submission Name: Holding on to Intent (working title)dots

    Author: rev.jpfadeproof
    ASL Info:    27/m/nyc
    Elite Ratio:    6.09 - 366/363/154
    Words: 155
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       ah...just threw this on paper because I had to get it out of the soul. Needs lots of work...

    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsHolding on to Intent (working title)dots

    This morning I was moved to tears for the sun-
    In the way it swirls in the sky like a bright goose egg

    It reminded me of you, in how

    Loving you is like holding its yoke as it twizzles in the hand- how
    You cannot be clenched; how you simply seep through my fingers the tighter I grasp

    The day is now spent- the yellow smeared in my palms has dissolved into

    Blue- like

    1,000 intents of the poet that spiral listlessly as misplaced words
    That strewn the bare white fields of a horizon that never comes-

    Most nights I could almost convince myself that you’re in love with me

    It’s easy when the stars slip in through the cracks and fleck my chest
    I’m too lit to resist-

    DiCicco Cosentino ©

    Submitted on 2017-06-16 21:42:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      "1,000 intents of the poet that spiral listlessly as misplaced words
    Strewn (over) bare white fields of a horizon that never comes- "

    of the two posts that I've read, this one that you feel "needs a lot of work" is closer to completion than you believe. even in its length it still "behaves" like minimalist poetry and gets to its wistful point more quickly and precisely than "You Don't Know Me."

    But those are just my thoughts on your thoughts.
    | Posted on 2017-06-17 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]

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