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    dots Submission Name: Black Witchdots
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    Author: endlessgame23
    ASL Info:    25/f/The Endless Table
    Elite Ratio:    3.22 - 28/42/44
    Words: 69
    Class/Type: Poetry/Betrayal
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    dotsBlack Witchdots
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    At night, when the moon is full
    Glowing bright and round
    The breeze begins to pull
    Autumn’s leaves unto the ground

    Evil’s mistress has come awake
    To wander the garden, Death
    Alone and time forgotten
    She sets to finish her quest

    Phantom lunar beams shine down
    Casting shadows in which she hides
    Whispering a curse upon the house
    That burnt her Life in lies




    Submitted on 2017-06-26 09:49:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i feel like I've been touch by the night, when i read your work. The hint of death and the completion of the where that came from ,, your on a go them here , story it up. The next ,"chapter" of "Black Witch", should be a rant.
    Teika5
    | Posted on 2017-07-14 00:00:00 | by teika5 | [ Reply to This ]
      Brilliant! A perfect piece for Halloween (my fav holiday). I enjoyed this poem because it tells a story...it sets a mood (and it isn't over powering)...and it leaves a little mystery for the reader: who is she? What happened to her? What will she do? In fact some of those questions are answered...in a subtle way.

    I also like how you have woven in the moon...my favorite season (autumn)...and is it just me, or is the "garden" a cemetery? How very macabre :) A garden of death...lovely, just lovely.

    This feels like an E. A. Poe piece...so I congratulate you on conveying similar eeriness as some of his work does.

    Thanks for sharing!

    Kelly
    | Posted on 2017-06-27 00:00:00 | by krs3332003 | [ Reply to This ]


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