Black Witch

Author: endlessgame23 ASL Info:    25/f/The Endless Table Elite Ratio:    3.22 - 28 /42 /44 Words: 69

Class/Type: Poetry /Betrayal Total Views: 1823 Average Vote:    No vote yet. Bytes: 472

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Black Witch

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At night, when the moon is full Glowing bright and round The breeze begins to pull Autumn’s leaves unto the ground Evil’s mistress has come awake To wander the garden, Death Alone and time forgotten She sets to finish her quest Phantom lunar beams shine down Casting shadows in which she hides Whispering a curse upon the house That burnt her Life in lies

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i feel like I've been touch by the night, when i read your work. The hint of death and the completion of the where that came from ,, your on a go them here , story it up. The next ,"chapter" of "Black Witch", should be a rant. Teika5

| Posted on 2017-07-14 00:00:00 | by teika5 | [ Reply to This ]

Brilliant! A perfect piece for Halloween (my fav holiday). I enjoyed this poem because it tells a story...it sets a mood (and it isn't over powering)...and it leaves a little mystery for the reader: who is she? What happened to her? What will she do? In fact some of those questions are answered...in a subtle way. I also like how you have woven in the moon...my favorite season (autumn)...and is it just me, or is the "garden" a cemetery? How very macabre :) A garden of death...lovely, just lovely. This feels like an E. A. Poe piece...so I congratulate you on conveying similar eeriness as some of his work does. Thanks for sharing! Kelly

| Posted on 2017-06-27 00:00:00 | by krs3332003 | [ Reply to This ]

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