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Black Witch

Author: endlessgame23
ASL Info:    25/f/The Endless Table
Elite Ratio:    3.22 - 28 /42 /44
Words: 69
Class/Type: Poetry /Betrayal
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Black Witch

At night, when the moon is full
Glowing bright and round
The breeze begins to pull
Autumn’s leaves unto the ground

Evil’s mistress has come awake
To wander the garden, Death
Alone and time forgotten
She sets to finish her quest

Phantom lunar beams shine down
Casting shadows in which she hides
Whispering a curse upon the house
That burnt her Life in lies

Submitted on 2017-06-26 09:49:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  i feel like I've been touch by the night, when i read your work. The hint of death and the completion of the where that came from ,, your on a go them here , story it up. The next ,"chapter" of "Black Witch", should be a rant.
| Posted on 2017-07-14 00:00:00 | by teika5 | [ Reply to This ]
  Brilliant! A perfect piece for Halloween (my fav holiday). I enjoyed this poem because it tells a sets a mood (and it isn't over powering)...and it leaves a little mystery for the reader: who is she? What happened to her? What will she do? In fact some of those questions are a subtle way.

I also like how you have woven in the favorite season (autumn)...and is it just me, or is the "garden" a cemetery? How very macabre :) A garden of death...lovely, just lovely.

This feels like an E. A. Poe I congratulate you on conveying similar eeriness as some of his work does.

Thanks for sharing!

| Posted on 2017-06-27 00:00:00 | by krs3332003 | [ Reply to This ]

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