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Twilight


Author: endlessgame23
ASL Info:    25/f/The Endless Table
Elite Ratio:    3.22 - 28 /42 /44
Words: 14
Class/Type: Haiku /Nature
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Twilight




At Heaven’s collapse
Gaia sighs, trembles
And meets the Sun




Submitted on 2017-06-26 10:08:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  The sea of night ,
Fell, back
caught by the
morning-star

teika5...... Has been touch
| Posted on 2017-07-16 00:00:00 | by teika5 | [ Reply to This ]
  Nicely done. I read your other postings also. I like what you are doing.

Jim
| Posted on 2017-06-28 00:00:00 | by my shadow | [ Reply to This ]


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