Twilight

Author: endlessgame23 ASL Info:    25/f/The Endless Table Elite Ratio:    3.22 - 28 /42 /44 Words: 14

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Twilight

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At Heaven’s collapse Gaia sighs, trembles And meets the Sun

Submitted on 2017-06-26 10:08:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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The sea of night , Fell, back caught by the morning-star teika5...... Has been touch

| Posted on 2017-07-16 00:00:00 | by teika5 | [ Reply to This ]

Nicely done. I read your other postings also. I like what you are doing. Jim

| Posted on 2017-06-28 00:00:00 | by my shadow | [ Reply to This ]

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