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    dots Submission Name: lost in translationdots
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    Author: robbie
    ASL Info:    20/m/mi
    Elite Ratio:    2.79 - 53/54/36
    Words: 250
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Description:
       my inspiration is in my mood im in and the time and place I write to get my feeling out because I have no one else to share with or cant find the right words to use any feed back is welcome


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    dotslost in translationdots
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    I work my fingers to the bone
    just so you can sit on a throne
    I spend hours away
    and in the end all you can say
    is you were right and I was wrong
    in between your hits from the bong
    my son and I accepted you
    and we changed too
    just to adapt to who you are
    little did we know your a drunk at the bar
    I told you id work to take care of us all
    on my dollar you kill it and have a ball
    no care to what I say
    you will party in your own way
    as I work my fingers to the bone
    you yell at me and cast another stone
    get me to the point that I raise my voice
    push me to where I have no choice
    if left to you we would party every night
    to me that is a real sick sight
    so different do we see life
    but yet we're together thru all this strife
    as I work my fingers to the bone
    I still let you sit on the throne
    scared to rise and scared to chose
    so much sacrifice, so much time to lose
    but its almost to that point I have to
    my son and I or a life with you
    thru the fog my choice is clear
    and the end of us is near






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