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    dots Submission Name: Warm fuzzy "no" dots
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    Author: teika5
    ASL Info:    46 / m/ parts unknow
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 46/9/20
    Words: 125
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
    Total Views: 849
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    Bytes: 735



    Description:
       The is my way of saying , Don't carry the "no", over to some thing that might be a yes ,,. Let the NO wash and let those worries of that moment go with it ,.


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    dotsWarm fuzzy "no" dots
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    So many doors close .
    and, it takes patents
    for next to open

    Help is far off sometimes
    then, again it's right there
    all there is to do is forego the time
    least resentment, to take you too.

    to a passer-by, all is a mask
    they could be reeling from their experiences
    of, the impassable no's of the pass

    sometimes people like
    their ways they perfected
    the many ways to help
    someone feel like a chump

    door slammers ,
    window crashing ,
    emotional slashing
    still no, when there was a yes ?

    some are just that as we or I
    twisted





    Submitted on 2017-07-08 12:13:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I like your theme here very much. Some grammatical errors make the flow choppy, but with a slower, second read through, Comprehension of the story was better.

    I, too, find myself to be too much of a "Yes, Man", and have only just begun to realize I am not responsible for/to other people and that it's perfectly alright to tell them "No"
    and sometimes that is the best help you can give a person.
    Great poem and thanks for sharing.

    H
    | Posted on 2017-07-12 00:00:00 | by endlessgame23 | [ Reply to This ]


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