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    dots Submission Name: The Eternal Momentdots
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    Author: endlessgame23
    ASL Info:    25/f/The Endless Table
    Elite Ratio:    3.34 - 27/39/36
    Words: 111
    Class/Type: Prose/Love
    Total Views: 256
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 807



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       I could sit atop the mountains and go blind.


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    dotsThe Eternal Momentdots
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    Her smile...
    as wide as the horizon.
    Lighting her eyes in all the
    vibrant, wondrous colors
    of the nascent dawn
    Blues, greens, yellows
    Crowning Day's beginning with
    Hope and Beauty.

    I am mesmerized
    loathe to turn away.
    I'd rather my eyes burn
    to tasteless ash watching.
    Her smile growing ever brighter,
    Than dare close my eyes to
    Aurora, my Love.
    If, Anyone at all, ever
    awful enough, starved enough
    Evil enough to darken your smile,
    and attempt to extinguish
    Your sunny lips,
    All warm with passion and faith.
    My darling, my dear
    I will be happy to drown them
    in the flood your tears.




    Submitted on 2017-07-12 10:59:59     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      what ,,The passion in this love story is warm .. I like the ways your passion tuns cold told shy back to a fall for. You got a real knack for helping along the plot of the ,,,.

    hey,, Do you think that the wi-fi , is ever so shocking humanity, ???? air wires . Teika5 , lol
    | Posted on 2017-07-14 00:00:00 | by teika5 | [ Reply to This ]


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