The Eternal Moment

Author: endlessgame23 ASL Info:    25/f/The Endless Table Elite Ratio:    3.22 - 28 /42 /44 Words: 111

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The Eternal Moment

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Her smile... as wide as the horizon. Lighting her eyes in all the vibrant, wondrous colors of the nascent dawn Blues, greens, yellows Crowning Day's beginning with Hope and Beauty. I am mesmerized loathe to turn away. I'd rather my eyes burn to tasteless ash watching. Her smile growing ever brighter, Than dare close my eyes to Aurora, my Love. If, Anyone at all, ever awful enough, starved enough Evil enough to darken your smile, and attempt to extinguish Your sunny lips, All warm with passion and faith. My darling, my dear I will be happy to drown them in the flood your tears.

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what ,,The passion in this love story is warm .. I like the ways your passion tuns cold told shy back to a fall for. You got a real knack for helping along the plot of the ,,,. hey,, Do you think that the wi-fi , is ever so shocking humanity, ???? air wires . Teika5 , lol

| Posted on 2017-07-14 00:00:00 | by teika5 | [ Reply to This ]

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