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The Eternal Moment

Author: endlessgame23
ASL Info:    25/f/The Endless Table
Elite Ratio:    3.22 - 28 /42 /44
Words: 111
Class/Type: Prose /Love
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I could sit atop the mountains and go blind.

The Eternal Moment

Her smile...
as wide as the horizon.
Lighting her eyes in all the
vibrant, wondrous colors
of the nascent dawn
Blues, greens, yellows
Crowning Day's beginning with
Hope and Beauty.

I am mesmerized
loathe to turn away.
I'd rather my eyes burn
to tasteless ash watching.
Her smile growing ever brighter,
Than dare close my eyes to
Aurora, my Love.
If, Anyone at all, ever
awful enough, starved enough
Evil enough to darken your smile,
and attempt to extinguish
Your sunny lips,
All warm with passion and faith.
My darling, my dear
I will be happy to drown them
in the flood your tears.

Submitted on 2017-07-12 10:59:59     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  what ,,The passion in this love story is warm .. I like the ways your passion tuns cold told shy back to a fall for. You got a real knack for helping along the plot of the ,,,.

hey,, Do you think that the wi-fi , is ever so shocking humanity, ???? air wires . Teika5 , lol
| Posted on 2017-07-14 00:00:00 | by teika5 | [ Reply to This ]

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