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    dots Submission Name: A weight of the World dots

    Author: teika5
    ASL Info:    46 / m/ artesia ca
    Elite Ratio:    4.58 - 19/6/9
    Words: 98
    Class/Type: Prose/Passion
    Total Views: 46
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       This is a pile of words, to express ,, what my be happening to those out there,, and and lost, . On these summer Days.

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    dotsA weight of the World dots

    We camping people
    of urban affairs
    walk a path to no-where,...

    With tires ,"tires"
    peeling layers of ,,"asphalt"

    we awake the day
    to anew dread

    But-oh- the ,"road Dirt "
    the fine particles ,Tis of The
    Bits at us on hot days ,

    A war with self
    is our anix
    talking all sort of nonsense

    mired with choices
    and a crazy,, Jesus,
    in our head to mode ,too
    becoming - a- dirt of ,"Humanity"

    Submitted on 2017-07-14 12:36:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Awakening conscience can be painful and make you feel as if you are perilously perched upon the precipice of madness.
    However, the quest to become more Human than Human is a worthwhile journey with a destination of peace and compassion.

    This piece expresses that in a hurried, broken manner. Which is wonderful considering it's a prose about being on the move within Humanity.
    "Got no time for these pro-found thoughts, but I gotta write them anyway. Hold the steering wheel, Jesse!"

    Great write, thanks for sharing,
    | Posted on 2017-07-17 00:00:00 | by endlessgame23 | [ Reply to This ]

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