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    dots Submission Name: The Raven Liesdots
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    Author: poetotoe
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    Words: 156
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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    The Raven Lies

    When your passions, lies becomes you
    I cannot resist you, I speak of experience
    of your tell tale lies, the Raven Never More.

    The game of love, of Doves as lovers is over
    get use to it, never end, what was never there
    the love between Doves and Ravens, evermore.

    Birds of the same feather can fly together, not us
    for I am a Peacock, you are the Raven never more
    never to knock at my door, I changed my lock again.

    Forevermore, I bar your passions and cry’s evermore
    I once let into my heart, you pecked at, now, nevermore
    cry your Raven cries evermore, nevermore to peck at me.

    Never leave me, nevermore all your lies, all my eyes to see
    your black heart fly away nevermore, nevermore to leave me
    I did it and admit to it, never the same nevermore to be caged.




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