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Sea Witch


Author: endlessgame23
ASL Info:    25/f/The Endless Table
Elite Ratio:    3.22 - 28 /42 /44
Words: 68
Class/Type: Lyrics /
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Beware the briny bitch of the deep for if she smells your soul, it is hers to keep.


Sea Witch



Shadows lost upon the shore
A journey you will endeavor
Take a breath; it is your last
As you pass into the Ether

Come with me into the sea
where we can swim forever
Down below, far from home
We belong together

Love has bound Land and Sea
A bond that cannot be weathered
You are mine, for all time
Our ties will never be severed




Submitted on 2017-07-17 14:49:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  The endless expanse of the cosmic ocean from which all life was rendered. When I was younger I used to dream of this "sea witch" and hope her benevolence would match my philanthropy.

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| Posted on 2017-09-19 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]
  I like it, the rhythms and use of rhyme are actually very well done. Very hard to get that effect. I find this kind of writing, you know more lyrical comes unnaturally to me, but I appreciate it when I read it.

I also think its a cool title. Maybe you could elaborate more on this theme in other poems, the pulling you down into the deep in an embrace and love as like taking pleasire in drowning. That would be interesting.

Nice work anyway

-Craig
| Posted on 2017-07-18 00:00:00 | by Wolfwatching | [ Reply to This ]
  Take me ,ah. The love of the Nither world . Working with shadows can led, us to the there. A bond ; i felt compelled , with mystery . Thank you , or the comment of Wicca Ways.
Teika5
| Posted on 2017-07-18 00:00:00 | by teika5 | [ Reply to This ]


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