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    dots Submission Name: Sea Witchdots
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    Author: endlessgame23
    ASL Info:    25/f/The Endless Table
    Elite Ratio:    3.31 - 27/39/39
    Words: 68
    Class/Type: Lyrics/
    Total Views: 150
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 421



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       Beware the briny bitch of the deep for if she smells your soul, it is hers to keep.


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    dotsSea Witchdots
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    Shadows lost upon the shore
    A journey you will endeavor
    Take a breath; it is your last
    As you pass into the Ether

    Come with me into the sea
    where we can swim forever
    Down below, far from home
    We belong together

    Love has bound Land and Sea
    A bond that cannot be weathered
    You are mine, for all time
    Our ties will never be severed




    Submitted on 2017-07-17 14:49:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      The endless expanse of the cosmic ocean from which all life was rendered. When I was younger I used to dream of this "sea witch" and hope her benevolence would match my philanthropy.

    http://www.eliteskills.com/z/183324
    | Posted on 2017-09-19 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]
      I like it, the rhythms and use of rhyme are actually very well done. Very hard to get that effect. I find this kind of writing, you know more lyrical comes unnaturally to me, but I appreciate it when I read it.

    I also think its a cool title. Maybe you could elaborate more on this theme in other poems, the pulling you down into the deep in an embrace and love as like taking pleasire in drowning. That would be interesting.

    Nice work anyway

    -Craig
    | Posted on 2017-07-18 00:00:00 | by Wolfwatching | [ Reply to This ]
      Take me ,ah. The love of the Nither world . Working with shadows can led, us to the there. A bond ; i felt compelled , with mystery . Thank you , or the comment of Wicca Ways.
    Teika5
    | Posted on 2017-07-18 00:00:00 | by teika5 | [ Reply to This ]


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