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    dots Submission Name: Ritual Hungerdots
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    Author: endlessgame23
    ASL Info:    25/f/The Endless Table
    Elite Ratio:    3.84 - 21/25/20
    Words: 42
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/
    Total Views: 120
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    Bytes: 295



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       I really like to rework old nursery rhymes.


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    A tisket, a tasket
    a gangrene-yellow basket
    full of hearts from Lover's passed
    stolen from their caskets.

    I stopped them, I chopped them
    on the plate, I dropped them
    I savored the flavors of my feast
    satiating my ravenous inner beast




    Submitted on 2017-07-17 15:04:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Being critical of your own work is a valuable tool to have in your pocket. You could liken the practice to a builder who was constantly pulling out his measuring tape and his leveler but at the end he would have a flat surface and boards the same length. So, I smile at you getting your level out.
    | Posted on 2017-07-18 00:00:00 | by Daniel Barlow | [ Reply to This ]
      The last line is awful to the flow of the piece..
    | Posted on 2017-07-17 00:00:00 | by endlessgame23 | [ Reply to This ]


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