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Submission Name: Ritual Hunger dots

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Author:	endlessgame23
ASL Info:	25/f/The Endless Table
Elite Ratio:	3.22 - 28/42/44
Words:	42

Class/Type:	Random Thoughts/
Total Views:	852
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
Bytes:	295

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I really like to rework old nursery rhymes.

Ritual Hunger dots

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A tisket, a tasket
a gangrene-yellow basket
full of hearts from Lover's passed
stolen from their caskets.

I stopped them, I chopped them
on the plate, I dropped them
I savored the flavors of my feast
satiating my ravenous inner beast

Submitted on 2017-07-17 15:04:40 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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Being critical of your own work is a valuable tool to have in your pocket. You could liken the practice to a builder who was constantly pulling out his measuring tape and his leveler but at the end he would have a flat surface and boards the same length. So, I smile at you getting your level out.
| Posted on 2017-07-18 00:00:00 | by Daniel Barlow | [ Reply to This ]
The last line is awful to the flow of the piece..
| Posted on 2017-07-17 00:00:00 | by endlessgame23 | [ Reply to This ]

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Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3 It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
It means a lot to them, as it does to you.