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    Author: Daniel Barlow
    Elite Ratio:    5.98 - 2126/2084/1587
    Words: 56
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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         like because there is nothing for it.
         like because there is nothing to describe it.


         like Osiris - bestowing me with the Ankh
         i bore you an immortal love but sweetness
                                                 what of divinity?

         

         like some grounded wounded
         bird screaming at a human presence






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      A bit crass, ole-chap , Buti dig were you are coming from. It does seem like the God Of living truth has a little less than raw space divinity .


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    | Posted on 2017-08-02 00:00:00 | by teika5 | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this, so deep and mysterious. I'm particularly attracted to how you equated Love to a wounded bird. Perfectly fitting.
    "I am at your mercy or Giantess, crush me or heal me. My life is at your whimsy."
    Well done.

    Thanks for sharing,
    HH
    | Posted on 2017-07-18 00:00:00 | by endlessgame23 | [ Reply to This ]
      Interesting write Daniel. A little bit impenetrable like the word of the title itself, but it tantalises the reader enough to investigate. I think the Ankh was a kind of sceptre if Im not mistaken? I want to google it but Im kind of locked in to the comment box on my phone. If it is though I like the divine right of Kings aspect to it.

    The last two lines remind me of Ted Hughes' crow. I think its cool how you turn the form pf tbe letters into a sort of scream. Cant check the song out right now but I will after.
    | Posted on 2017-07-18 00:00:00 | by Wolfwatching | [ Reply to This ]


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