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    dots Submission Name: dots

    Author: Daniel Barlow
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    Words: 40
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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                   from their appropriate place
                   so that one
                   might rise.
                   from the ground up.
                   not as a
                   movement, but


              the clicking of gamma rays
              a thin of ribbon.

    Submitted on 2017-07-18 21:57:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      If only it were easy to manifest our energy in such a way.
    But a place for everything and everything in it's place.

    What I like most about this piece is how you said so much in just
    a few well curving lines. I could read it 10 more times and still find different stories in them.

    Thanks for sharing,
    | Posted on 2017-07-19 00:00:00 | by endlessgame23 | [ Reply to This ]

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