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    Author: Daniel Barlow
    Elite Ratio:    5.98 - 2126/2084/1587
    Words: 40
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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                   Things
                   _____
                   from their appropriate place
                   so that one
                   might rise.
                   from the ground up.
                   not as a
                   movement, but

              

              the clicking of gamma rays
              a thin of ribbon.






    Submitted on 2017-07-18 21:57:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      If only it were easy to manifest our energy in such a way.
    But a place for everything and everything in it's place.

    What I like most about this piece is how you said so much in just
    a few well curving lines. I could read it 10 more times and still find different stories in them.
    Beautiful.

    Thanks for sharing,
    HH
    | Posted on 2017-07-19 00:00:00 | by endlessgame23 | [ Reply to This ]


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