[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav

  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav

    << | >>

    dots Submission Name: Last Correspondencedots

    Author: Angeles
    Elite Ratio:    3.87 - 5/13/19
    Words: 159
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 486
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 993


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsLast Correspondencedots

    And when you recline into the yellow leaves,
    Lipstick-scrawled; those tired phrases
    I try to keep looking straight ahead
    Try to stop my jaw from clenching.
    I think its very sad you have to do that,
    But then I could ruffle through those memories
    The scribbles written out for ten years;
    My charms; and youd see them swept away
    Away and down some other street
    Where former lovers pass each other by.
    No one recognises the street,
    The name of the street is not important
    And the names of the lovers are all forgotten
    I write them down in my notebook
    And they seem like heirlooms of dead language
    Dead as that language you use
    Cold as the reply to a question, coldly rational
    Do you know I see the wall youve built, and Im not sure
    theres anything on the other side anymore
    I do think its true though, the wall's there

    Submitted on 2017-07-18 22:30:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!

    ||| Comments |||
      Bitter and reserved and faintly forgiving.
    I really liked this. Especially the end,

    "Do you know I see the wall youve built, and Im not sure
    theres anything on the other side anymore
    I do think its true though, the wall's there"

    The high walls of a lonely kingdom, cannon blasted and lichen covered.

    Thanks for sharing,
    | Posted on 2017-07-19 00:00:00 | by endlessgame23 | [ Reply to This ]

    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?


    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

    4th Season of Vivaldi written by HisNameIsNoMore
    the living moment written by ShyOne
    new moon written by CrypticBard
    Brigit written by endlessgame23
    written by Daniel Barlow
    Before, Now, & After written by SincerWritinAsh
    AI written by poetotoe
    Every..... written by jackz
    Whiteout written by layDsayD
    cleverly shunned written by CrypticBard
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (final) written by endlessgame23
    Estranged / Shocks written by Daniel Barlow
    written by Daniel Barlow
    The Severed Head written by HisNameIsNoMore
    What happens written by Wolfwatching
    4th of July written by layDsayD
    Blood Stains Are The Worst written by ForgottenGraves
    Push written by JanePlane
    It's Night Now written by RisingSon
    More then just goodbye written by faideddarkness
    PEARL (Exclusive Poem) 10th Anniversary... written by Cordell
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (7) written by endlessgame23
    written by Daniel Barlow
    Sunset written by rev.jpfadeproof
    Wavelength written by saartha
    Primitive Lapse written by Crestfallenman
    World I No Longer Want written by ForgottenGraves
    Alone in the Crowd written by SavedDragon
    Bond written by saartha
    written by Daniel Barlow




    User Name:


    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]

    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]

    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]