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    dots Submission Name: Last Correspondencedots
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    Author: Angeles
    Elite Ratio:    3.87 - 5/13/19
    Words: 159
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsLast Correspondencedots
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    And when you recline into the yellow leaves,
    Lipstick-scrawled; those tired phrases
    I try to keep looking straight ahead
    Try to stop my jaw from clenching.
    I think its very sad you have to do that,
    But then I could ruffle through those memories
    The scribbles written out for ten years;
    My charms; and youd see them swept away
    Away and down some other street
    Where former lovers pass each other by.
    No one recognises the street,
    The name of the street is not important
    And the names of the lovers are all forgotten
    I write them down in my notebook
    And they seem like heirlooms of dead language
    Dead as that language you use
    Cold as the reply to a question, coldly rational
    Do you know I see the wall youve built, and Im not sure
    theres anything on the other side anymore
    I do think its true though, the wall's there








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      Bitter and reserved and faintly forgiving.
    I really liked this. Especially the end,

    "Do you know I see the wall youve built, and Im not sure
    theres anything on the other side anymore
    I do think its true though, the wall's there"

    The high walls of a lonely kingdom, cannon blasted and lichen covered.

    Thanks for sharing,
    HH
    | Posted on 2017-07-19 00:00:00 | by endlessgame23 | [ Reply to This ]


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