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    dots Submission Name: Devil's Presents (Gift wrapped number One)dots

    Author: endlessgame23
    ASL Info:    25/f/The Endless Table
    Elite Ratio:    3.24 - 28/41/44
    Words: 182
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 554
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       An Anthology of whispered prayers
    from the cracked lips of angels.
    God Bless all the little children.

    Devil's Presents is a series that is very close to my heart.
    I don't mind critique, but please use a light hand :)

    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsDevil's Presents (Gift wrapped number One)dots

    Chapter One

    It's only just beginning, Darling..

    He, a man with a musical voice.
    You were alone.
    Confession in your presence
    And myself.

    I think for the day
    Tomorrow adjourned.
    There was a little stir
    Into his chambers..

    Chapter Two


    He echoed the heart to his wife.
    He brought out a cigarette.
    Nothing that he gives, the same or even.

    This was the last week of July.
    The last month, she had been bulging.

    All the running around..

    He reflected… Relief.

    As usual they were looking for.

    Merciless Hunt
    Possible suspect:
    No alibi
    Looking: very tired

    Chapter Three

    Isn't it FUNNY?!

    Some of the girls hunt.

    The girl disappeared.
    They hunted her.
    She’s pretty.
    The great, big room echoes..

    She was grabbed.

    She’s not there.

    Somewhere, Baby.


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      I like to think that the "devil's presents" are a natural progression created with the dynamic progressiveness of coordinated interjection. A relatively positive integration in time. Power is a problematic diversity matrix whose climax resembles the apotheosis of zoomorphic zoolatry's social contiguities on the demagoguery. Elan-vital's orthogenesis overtures incarnate. I like your stuff, it makes me think!!!!!!

    | Posted on 2017-09-26 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]
      The arrangement of the small story. A inventive way to go about it .
    The Devil Presents Gift #1 , we notice that time line July , was the gift.

    I guess the new parents , were new to everything .
    Thinking of how this arrangement is , it's choppy but flows
    wow, the mind set for this quite different.

    " I like it," said Teika5
    | Posted on 2017-07-21 00:00:00 | by teika5 | [ Reply to This ]

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