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    Author: Daniel Barlow
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    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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                   i give homage to the star.




         which despite. the specter. of aloneness.
         despite the tangle of its pieces.
         suggests. in sense.      So too.




                                                                the universe.





         Still manages
                                                           to shine brightly.

         like metal filings





                        on white paper





    .
         

    As.           Solar.      Winds.      Blow.






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