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    dots Submission Name: Ammit Ma'atdots
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    Author: endlessgame23
    ASL Info:    25/f/The Endless Table
    Elite Ratio:    3.24 - 28/41/44
    Words: 122
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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    dotsAmmit Ma'atdots
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    I am mesmerized
    by the way smoke
    leaves her ruby lips
    in wispy tendrils
    of blue Angel's breath.
    I die to confess
    in her presence
    a love unrequited.
    My body brimming with
    Desire reluctantly acquitted.

    Yearning, aching, burning
    deep beneath my soul.
    A fire I cannot control
    the lust to kiss her sticky lips
    and touch her sacred temple
    with untouchable fingertips
    leading down to slow undress
    Quietly, secretly blessed
    by Blue Angel's little death..

    I am her undoing
    Destruction of her feather
    nothing left against which
    my dead heart to measure.




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      Interesting and somewhat hypnotic. Thanks.

    Lloyd
    | Posted on 2017-07-30 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]


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