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    dots Submission Name: The Devil Loved Medots
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    Author: endlessgame23
    ASL Info:    25/f/The Endless Table
    Elite Ratio:    3.24 - 28/41/44
    Words: 179
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 361
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    dotsThe Devil Loved Medots
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    Oh, how I miss you
    Lord of my every thought
    My body cries out to
    have you back inside of me

    "it is forbidden"
    whisper of my soul
    But Gods, I am weak
    I cannot fight
    I lose control

    I put you in my mouth
    and set you on fire
    Breathe in deep
    give into desire

    I am lost in the
    throes of pure addiction
    Numb to the consequences
    of my fatal affliction

    Can't live without
    that burn on my lips
    Hopelessly devoted to
    Death between my fingertips

    Black, viscous Love
    at the back of my throat
    alive, bitter, vile
    one breath and I choke

    King of smoke and ash
    I am your slave
    worshiping you
    as I dig my grave

    Gift of the Godking
    Cancer of my every cell
    dearest, Darling Nicotine
    May we burn together in Hell




    Submitted on 2017-08-02 07:02:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      There is many thoughts within this way , a love that is forbidden .
    An, yet It rings with me , this part , king of some and ash ,
    I am your slave
    worshiping you
    as I dig my grave.
    Why is this so important
    it tells' the tail
    letting us into
    the spell

    Teika5
    | Posted on 2017-08-15 00:00:00 | by teika5 | [ Reply to This ]
      There is many thoughts within this way , a love that is forbidden .
    An, yet It rings with me , this part , king of some and ash ,
    I am your slave
    worshiping you
    as I dig my grave.
    Why is this so important
    it tells' the tail
    letting us into
    the spell

    Teika5
    | Posted on 2017-08-15 00:00:00 | by teika5 | [ Reply to This ]
      Yet another "wow" from you! While it was understood after a few lines what your poem was about...it took on a different appeal (symbolism?) almost as quickly. It sounded almost sexual...and erotic. Cigarettes sounded almost human...they sounded like sexual partners (filling your desire).

    Well written and thought provoking (is smoking sexual?)...

    thanks for sharing...and now I need a cold shower :) lol

    Kelly
    | Posted on 2017-08-03 00:00:00 | by krs3332003 | [ Reply to This ]


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