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Whispered


Author: endlessgame23
ASL Info:    25/f/The Endless Table
Elite Ratio:    3.22 - 28 /42 /44
Words: 40
Class/Type: Misc /Misc
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Whispered



Rock-a-by babies

rocked by earth quakes

volcanoes nonstop

storms winds bellow

the air dense and hot

when the Dome breaks

the Waters will fall

Goodbye to Creation

Destruction of all




Submitted on 2017-08-04 15:24:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Now , now holy -shit , has too much to say with you . The song is not a good one though I was only honest saying i like the base of the truth of it ,. It reminds me of the proper way to wait for Earthquakes ,<under a bridge> . The simmering of your mind is a turn on , with those fires burning into a song , ,, Teika5,,
| Posted on 2017-08-07 00:00:00 | by teika5 | [ Reply to This ]


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