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    dots Submission Name: Rooted in Naturedots
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    Author: Chelebel
    Elite Ratio:    2.2 - 53/167/173
    Words: 208
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsRooted in Naturedots
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    To reach out like a blossom,
    a bud, reaching for the
    moisture in the air.






    For the atmospheric quench.











    Pollination, regeneration,
    and lifting its kin
    to travel places where
    it could not.





    Allowing the wind
    To take it places
    Far beyond
    It's capacity





    And should the wings
    Take flight
    Its seed
    Shall travel too.






    For it was seeded
    and then eventually,
    rooted
    where it stood to
    contemplate
    the universe.



































    Nature never contemplates
    the universe.
    It's just a part of it.
    It just accepts with
    no thoughts.









    Emitting energy to give and
    continues to give until,
    It; itself







    can give no more.




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      To me those spacings make the poem mucho enjoyable, think you did a bang up job with them. When I'm writing I always fuss around with them, I find them crucial to the timing / as if it was spoken word. 1 bit of space is not equal to another bit of space, put it down to an idon'tknowwhy science. I freely admit, it is not something I have mastered, as you might note from the many variations in my journals. Think you got it perfectly with this one. Poem looks professional, reads as such. awesome.
    | Posted on 2017-08-06 00:00:00 | by Daniel Barlow | [ Reply to This ]


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