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    Author: Daniel Barlow
    Elite Ratio:    5.95 - 2137/2098/1678
    Words: 87
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    while i look for pink shells that shine in the sun




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                                  it was thirty secs or so
                                  for which i had suffered a torment
                                  of unrealization. distraction, boredom.

                                  the tedious.
                             menial use of my parts



                        then came

                        such bolts of intelligence
                        synapses where there had been none
                        chaotic ~ culmination ~ rod.
                        and fire
                        a communication to
                        stupefy the length of

                                                                     a body



    sh ocking the vagi na






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