Writingpoetry

[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

dotsdots
nav
  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav



    nav
  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav



    << | >>
    poetry


    dots Submission Name: Lie back & tan dots
    --------------------------------------------------------





    Author: Daniel Barlow
    Elite Ratio:    5.98 - 2121/2077/1562
    Words: 118
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 251
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 3991



    Description:
       
    while i look for pink shells that shine in the sun




    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsLie back & tan dots
    -------------------------------------------





                                  it was thirty secs or so
                                  for which i had suffered a torment
                                  of unrealization. distraction, boredom.

                                  the tedious.
                             menial use of my parts



                        then came

                        such bolts of intelligence
                        synapses where there had been none
                        chaotic ~ culmination ~ rod.
                        and
    fire
                        a communication
    t
    o
                        stupefy the length of

                                                                     a body



    sh ocking the vagi na






    Submitted on 2017-08-06 17:47:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||
      misc misc
    | Posted on 2017-08-08 00:00:00 | by thesunbird | [ Reply to This ]


    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?



    201886

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

    The World written by jjd
    Snippet written by Daniel Barlow
    Ciggarettes written by Poetic_tragedy6
    Delicious Stews written by elephantasia
    Deep written by Janesaddiction
    Relentless. The Visceral Fracture. written by Daniel Barlow
    Sword in the Water written by Wolfwatching
    Verse: written by Daniel Barlow
    Lost Inside the Race written by ForgottenGraves
    Adoration written by TheStillSilence
    Day 5 written by TheStillSilence
    Mystery Read written by kyserin
    The Abyss of Love written by poetotoe
    A bit of Pain written by teika5
    Honeymoon written by TheStillSilence
    To the Artist written by HisNameIsNoMore
    The Want written by Daniel Barlow
    A Thousand Reflections written by endlessgame23
    no sky on the other side written by teika5
    Vortex: The Imagination That Is written by KeeperOfLight
    The Curtain Call written by faideddarkness
    When Sirens Whisper written by HisNameIsNoMore
    FamiliarDemons ©™ written by kyserin
    Loop-di-Loop written by endlessgame23
    Untitled written by Daniel Barlow
    Keep written by TheStillSilence
    Beauty Rest written by jackz
    None the Wiser written by endlessgame23
    Starseed written by endlessgame23
    Things They (Don't) Say written by TheStillSilence

    Google
     


    poetry

    dotsLogindots

    User Name:

    Password:

    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]


    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems
    Posted

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]



    FontSize:
    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]
     Poetry