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Submission Name: Lie back & tan dots

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Author:	Daniel Barlow
Elite Ratio:	6 - 2117/2065/1540
Words:	118

Class/Type:	Poetry/Misc
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while i look for pink shells that shine in the sun

Lie back & tan dots

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                              it was thirty secs or so
                              for which i had suffered a torment
                              of unrealization. distraction, boredom.

                              the tedious.
                         menial use of my parts

                    then came

                    such bolts of intelligence
                    synapses where there had been none
                    chaotic ~ culmination ~ rod.
                    and fire
                    a communication to
                    stupefy the length of

                                                                 a body

sh ocking the vagi na

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